Really Desperate Housewives
As devils’ advocate, I can appreciate this piece as archetypal British . . . wit. The “Big Issue” and “Special Brew” are trademarks of the subject here and gives the viewer all he needs to appreciate that the ‘man’ is homeless. Of course, his features could appear bedraggled, i.e. unkempt, for added clarification.
It works as a short clip that many British will probably find amusing. I don’t agree that you are writing for an ‘international’ audience. What would the say, Vietnamese or Peruvians make of such a sketch (and sketch it is)? To me, this is squarely aimed at the British and our exceptionally unique sense of wit and humour.
This could have been squeezed into a TV show such as ‘Naked Video’, were that still running in the UK.
As already mentioned, the writing style (punctuation) could be corrected to add impact, especially the line where the man gets up.
This aside, I am perplexed why this site has now become the place where (very) old gags are being converted into ‘screenplays’.
Does nobody have any original ideas for proper scripts or stories any more?
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