Monday Morning Blues (Extended Version)

Having the screenplay open with 'Character wakes, presses alarm' is overused. Many scriptreaders come across this with spec scripts and it can put them off straight away. The opening page of Luke getting up and dressed, for me, read a bit slow, but I'm questioning whether this was intended to set the tone. Some of the descriptive is too obvious, such as "Luke removes his bath-robe as he steps into the shower." But.... I enjoyed the storyline. I like the idea of the bank being robbed at the same time, and I like how Charles was explaining that Lukas should have planned ahead and in fact he had. And the reasoning behind the heist. Apart from the, in my opinion, slower opening, the rest of the script flowed and kept me reading. An enjoyable short script.