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made me cry,this one did.

Limited By My Horizon

by Shaili Sutaria

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Type: Short Story

Genre: Character, Personal Narrative, Tragedy,

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  • Dawn Chapman

  • 2011-04-05 07:09:21
  • I'll take another look at this later, but at first read I feel it is a good piece. 2 and 20 should be written though in my opinion with it being so short. Will come back after work :)
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  • Wendy Reakes

  • 2010-08-21 20:09:26
  • I thought this story was very poignant. I'm giving you a link here. http://www.creativewritinglife.com/cwlshortstorycontest.htm It's a competition I've just come across which is free to enter,ha a £100 prize and the theme is Regret. It could be perfect for this story. Give it a try. Nothing to lose. Wendy
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  • Shaili Sutaria

  • 2010-08-21 09:32:45
  • Done:) punctuations have been edited:)
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  • Shaili Sutaria

  • 2010-08-16 02:30:37
  • Thank you for your feed Back... I purposefully did not want to reveal untill the end the real cause of the separation as it builds anxiety amongst readers, however I see your point in atleast letting them know how she got herself into this situation, i.e: why did she lock the room in the first place, even if it were a casual reason i guess mentioning it clears a few thoughts. However I also liked the fact that because I hadn't stated why the door was locked, the reader pondered over whether it was a mistake or done on purpose... But I suppose one must let the reader catch on to something and not leave them to thier interpretation completely. Thank you for your pov ...working on this now..

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