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by Sparkles

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Enjoyable read. Didn't see the twist, which was nicely executed. I think sometimes you can overdo the metaphors - 'branches' would have been just as effective as 'fingers' in my opinion - but generally it flows well. One technical point - I'm not sure if a bitch can see into a dog's eyes when they are in the, ahem, doggy position.

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    • Sparkles

    • 2011-11-19 02:46:44
    • hehe thanks for your comments

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