A Quick Laugh, Could Have More
I liked this short, it was well written and created good visuals, if not a bit creepy with a fly headed human, eek. This is creative and would make a great short with lots of creative room for animation. I think that it could be improved, however, by maybe beefing it up a bit. The ending where the fly gets revenge could be a lot more effective had there been more of a build-up to it. One idea might be killing the first fly, then encounter ones that are proving to be larger and larger and then throwing in your twist. Overall, it's a fun read but could be better. Good Luck!
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