I love dialogue driven pieces and this delivered. I love how sheepish Feldon is- he's like a smarter version of Michael Scott. The whole sexual tension scene between Veronica and Bretaigne near the end was remarkably well written. A few errors here and there- just simple things like exclusion of words, but other then that I enjoyed this piece. Great read, great job!
It may seem like a low bar, but I just got done watching Year One and found this script to be much funnier. The timing and dialogue were usually good, and some of the characters (including the lawsuit-happy old lady) were easy to see on paper. Overall, it ws a very good read. Just make sure people can follow the cross-talking and whathaveyou.
Very entertaining. I chuckled all the way through it. I didn't even have to flip a coin to decide whether I liked it or not. I really did enjoy reading it.
carlj