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The Businessman

by David Taylor

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Dammit, he's a serious businessman!

Type: Short

Genre: Comedy, Farce, Satire,

Synopsis

Money is a serious business, whatever the circumstances.

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    • jayrex

    • 2011-07-26 22:18:39
    • Hi David, It's not bad. Nice punchline. I think you should name the business man as his name is mentioned by himself. Also, OS is O.S. All the best, Javier
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    • alffy

    • 2011-07-19 22:39:23
    • A short read so a short review; liked this and found the punchline, as it were, funny. Nice and tidy; no quibbles.
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    • mandanamo

    • 2011-02-13 23:11:25
    • I really liked this, not sure if it'll be 30 seconds though. I know the competition is over now, so nice work.
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    • David Taylor

    • 2010-11-15 12:05:11
    • The businessman has gone on a crash diet and the results have been uploaded, clocking in at around 25 seconds, by my reckoning. Thank you for all your kind reviews and helpful comments, hopefully the slim line version still lives up to them. Cheers.
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    • David Taylor

    • 2010-11-14 06:16:48
    • Yeah, I think this might run a little over 30 secs but not by a huge amount. I did intend for the dialogue to be spoken quickly (Like in one of those 50s Grant / Hepburn pictures) Also, most of the action would overlap the dialogue which would cut it down too. My fault for not making that clear in the script though...

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