Hahaha good stuff had me laughing out loud a the end. Honestly this competition is spoilt for choice.
Right the script's length. The dialogue (although brilliant) would have to be read really really fast in order for it to fit into the 30 second slot. However I think if edit the blocks of dialogue or perhaps take one of them out. It should fit fine.
Great stuff though, made me larf!
Keep it up man.
Also I gave 2 star's for the writing style based on the idea I don't think it would fit. Your actual writing 'style' was immaculate.
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