The Businessman

Your script had me chucking out loud. Humour is always a great ingredient, and you have a super sense of wit. Thanks for the laugh. Unfortunately, there are a couple of holes in the construct that pull the story down. One example is your opening description of a man in a suit and then having him off-screen when the dialogue begins. That threw me off a bit. I think it is perfectly acceptable to have him in the first shot, perhaps ruddy faced and pulling his hair out. Again, super job with conveying humour (the most difficult of the genres, in my opinion) so effortlessly.