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The Businessman

by David Taylor

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Hi David, I like the idea for what it is, a short skit with a decent punchline. If I was to offer tips, I'd say you could speed it up a little by getting rid of a few 'ing words. Maybe make him angrier during his long rant. Anyways good luck and well done.

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