The Whitest Lie
by Davo
Reviews
The opening lines of a piece are always the most important, and your first two sentences were very well done.
Your writing style is wond ... Read More
You have a very good writing technique. i felt it read a little more like a diary than a story to begin with but picked up later on. ... Read More
It is clear you have completely re-wrote this piece and it works very effectively. It now sounds like a story, rather than a sketch. I kept ... Read More