No offence taken Wayne. Any advice that will improve my writing can only be good advice. I can see where you're coming from with regards the passive and active and I'll work on it.
English as a written subject is not something I've ever studied and my school days were a long time back. I've got shelves full of books on writing, grammar and punctuation so it looks like there is a weakness nobody else has pointed out thus far.
Having difficulty on here at the moment getting logged in.
I have yet to come in on the same password and I've enabled pop-ups and cookies etc.
Anyway, many thanks for your read and critique.
Tom Benson - Writer