I really enjoyed this and thought it was a great idea. It made me think of the relationship between Peter Seller's Inspector Clouseau and Kato ;)
T ... Read More
Hi, thanks for letting me read your short.
I really liked the idea behind this - I'm not certain that I understood it entirely but that's actually ... Read More
A nice attemp at some complicated work, a lot to do in just 5 short pages. Possibly after this competition is over, you could maybe flesh this out int ... Read More
Here are some comments as I read your script. Please take them as they are intended to help not hinder.
'...lights a fire in the firep ... Read More
Again what a great concept! I love the idea of the extraordinary bond these two men share and how it is demonstrated in the story.
It is also very ... Read More
Its good to see that you have taken out a lot of the descriptive narratives that were pretty much redundant. That said, Its good to see that you have ... Read More
When I read the first draft, I liked it already. Now I believe it read nicely, and it is better framed. This is a clever script.
Regardless of that ... Read More
This read smoothly now. The way this wacky situation
works resembles somehow 'The Odd couple'. You should develop it and consider a picture, or a s ... Read More
I like this piece. Its concept is very interesting and I can not figure out how some people do not sympathize for these men, and the situation they li ... Read More