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THE BUTLER (Second Draft)

by turina

Odd couple
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This read smoothly now. The way this wacky situation works resembles somehow 'The Odd couple'. You should develop it and consider a picture, or a series. Maybe you could work on the dialogue a little more. You could enhance the tragic and the comic in this hilarious situation. Right now it stays right in the middle. You can go towards drama as well as towards pure comedy.

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