THE BUTLER (Second Draft)
When I read the first draft, I liked it already. Now I believe it read nicely, and it is better framed. This is a clever script.
Regardless of that, this redraft is interesting. It seems to channel Danny's energy differently, in a better way.
I'm glad that you used my suggestion and I believe it could make a very nice short. I know you feel you need to work it more, but it makes an interesting read already!
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