THE BUTLER (Second Draft)
Hi, thanks for letting me read your short.
I really liked the idea behind this - I'm not certain that I understood it entirely but that's actually one of the things i liked most about it. I think your readers will each take something different from it - it's open to interpretation.
My understanding was that the two men had fought together but Boris had sustained some sort of head injury and now has these episodes each day. His friend looks after him but has to defend himself?
There's a few formatting issues in here but that's easily fixed.
I really like how you don't explain in too much detail the background to the characters (you just leave little hints) and I wouldn't change this
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