The Drowned Man (revised - 2nd draft)
by Warren Paul Glover
Logline
When a young journalist is sent to investigate the apparent suicide of his doppelganger, he finds himself haunted by a secret from his past.
Type: Short
Genre: Supernatural, Drama, Psychological,
Synopsis
The Drowned Man is a ghost story. When a young journalist is sent to investigate the apparent suicide of his doppelganger, he finds himself haunted by a secret from his past. Is there a link between new-love interest, Daisy, and the now-deceased ex? And what can the young journo do to escape his fate?
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Warren Paul Glover
- 2010-04-18 08:24:01
- Thanks for your comments Joe, appreciate the feedback. This was the first screenplay I attempted.
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joeackroyd
- 2010-04-16 08:03:57
- this is an interesting story with a nice twist. parts of this are over written, for example the action paragraph explaining where each individual piece of clothing is strewn on the stairs is too much, "Bob and Daisy's various garments and his bag litter the stairs" or something like that is suffice. "daisy stops her lovemaking" should be edited to just "Daisy stops" etc. also, break up the long winded paragraphs, especially the opening one, can be too daunting for some readers. thanks for your comments on "clap clap", greatly appreciated. let me know when/if you post your "time stopping" script, i'd be interested to have a look. Joe
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