"Thessaloniki" Peirene competition.
Some fine sentiments but needs redrafting
Some good sentiments (being an immigrant is difficult, life can be tough, cities are unfriendly places) but there are problems with the language used, missing or incorrect words. A lot happens in a short space of time, feels a bit rushed, maybe cut down on what happens to concentrate on the essentials in the story.
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